On Day 10 of National Poetry Month, my friend Margaret Simon invites teacher-poets to compose a definito poem for VerseLove on Ethical ELA. It’s a form invented by her friend Heidi Mordhorst: “A free verse poem of 8-12 lines (aimed at readers 8-12 years old) that highlights wordplay as it demonstrates the meaning of a less common word, which always ends the poem.” Margaret’s suggestions: “Choose a word that has a certain fascination to you. You can look for the Word of the Day or any word that comes to mind. Play with the etymology of the word. What do the sounds mean? How does the meaning play with your thoughts? Explore the word using imagery, metaphor, and word play.”
So… I tried, I really tried, two things: 1) Getting away from my OLW, “awe” and 2) Keeping to the recommended 8-12 lines. I failed in both. I did, however, have a lot of fun with the unfolding of this pseudo-definito…
Awe “Definito”
So, Children,
maybe you have seen something
so wonderful
that you went all shivery inside
and maybe your skin
even got tingly
or goosebumpy
a thing
so beautiful
that you don’t have a word
for how beautiful it is
the feeling you get when
the sun’s slanted golden light
breaks through the clouds
after a storm
or when you see a rainbow,
(not made with crayons,
a real one) in the misty height,
colors glimmering, glowing, blurring,
an ethereal sight
—ethereal? Sorry. It means
to be so airy and light and beautiful
that the thing almost doesn’t belong
to this world
like stars, crystal-bright
against the black-velvet sky
on a winter’s night
maybe you have felt their stab of
silvery coldness, looking up
while your breath
hangs white
in the air
—yeah, that’s the feeling;
should we stop to
discuss metaphor
again?
No, it doesn’t have to be cold.
It can be a rush of warmth
on seeing a puppy
tiny, pink-mouthed, and so new
that its eyes are not yet open
—please note: The word is not spelled
the same way as what you say:
Awwww!
This, Children, is a homophone,
a poem for another day—
and the feeling might not come
from something you see
at all.
It can come from something you hear.
Once I was in an auditorium
where a girl who was trained in opera
sang just one high note;
her lips never moved
I couldn’t see her breathing
and the sound grew bigger
and bigger
and bigger
until the room
and my brain
and my heart
were filled, almost bursting
with the pure, clear
starlike sound
-oh yes, I can tell by your eyes
and your open mouths
that you are beginning
to understand
awe.

After the tornado
Fran, I’m glad you wrote an awe poem again today. (And that is wasn’t 8-12 lines) I love the audience you chose for your poem, and the sweet conversation you have with the children. One of my favorite images is where you say it doesn’t have to be cold, and then go on to share the best puppy description ever:
“It can be a rush of warmth
on seeing a puppy
tiny, pink-mouthed, and so new
that its eyes are not yet open”
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This was such fun writing, Denise. Thank you for these uplifting words. When the puppy materialized in my mind, well, it had to be included, which led to “awwww,” which led to another teaching point, lol – the way it always does in class!
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