Day 3 of National Poetry Month: for VerseLove at Ethical ELA, Gae Polisner and Lori Landau share poetry they composed via collaboration in a Google Doc as a means of inspiring one another and keeping the poetry flowing. The invitation today is to lift a line, a few words, or theme from a fellow VerseLove poet to create something new.
I lifted the line “Creaking of floor, house settling” from my kindred-spirit-writer-friend, Kim Johnson. She wrote of morning sounds, which include the “tick tick tick” of dog nails on the floor… see how “tick” made its way into my title, not even a conscious connection on my part. I noticed it when I reread her poem.
Time Ticks On
Creaking of floor
house settling
sighing at the close
of another day
shaft of sunlight
on the oak floor
glimmers brightest
just before fading
away
Beyond the window
tree shadows lengthen
across green green grass
I think about walking there
in the cool of the day
pretending
the shadows
are portals
where I might fall through
to find you

Tree shadows over green lawn. Horia Varlan. CC BY 2.0.
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I’ve also borrowed a line from Lori, “to find you” – I think the point of inspiration between Lori and Gae, “gone,” has fused to my own Muse this morning. The line intentionally borrowed from Genesis 3:8 is one of my favorites… only now, post-poem, am I realizing how it, too, is connected to “gone.”
PERFECT! Loved: ?pretending the shadows are portals where I might fall through to find you.” Pure genius.
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Thanks, Joanne ❤️
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Your flair for imagery recalls the poetry of Amy Lovell or William Carlos Williams. My favorite element is a metaphor: shadows as portals.
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Oh my – this is an incredible comparison! Thank you so much. I’ve been told that the shadows as portals would make a great opening for a fantasy novel. I honestly saw them stretching long over the grass and started imagining…
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